My Very Own Odd Couple pt.1

So for a class assignment, we had to create our very own odd couple and a two page comic that shows what their life is like.  I chose a straight bishounen character and a manly, gay man.   Here are the pencilled pages.

I had to really rush these pages.  They were mostly done over the course of  24 hours, and it really shows.  The story is that the gay man's mother is visiting, and the bishounen character is constantly hitting on her.  The mother eventually leaves and the bishounen character's younger brother is suddenly entranced by the gay man.


   

These are the error corrections I want to make.  However these also need to be fully inked by Teusday, and I have to work Saturday.